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Saturday, January 5, 2013

One Drop Three Drip

One    Two    Three    Drip

One    Two    Three    Drip

One    Drop   Three    Drip

Four four time.  Perfect.  Sometimes it plays in a weird rhythm.  Five eights or ninths.  Like strange Asian music. 

Sitting on the damp concrete, my back against the mildewed wall, I tap out a beat on my knees, my foot tapping an imaginary bass drum.

Occasionally there’s a misbeat ...

One    Two    Drip  Drip    Four 

.. and I add a jazz flourish.

You never can quite trust the slow leak.

It used to drive me half demented.  Now it’s the soundtrack to my life.

One    Two    Three    Drip



A drabble is a story of exactly 100 words

5 comments:

  1. That's haunting, Rob. Just...haunting. Thanks

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  2. My first comment on your excellent site.

    Terrific little story!!

    Love your reviews. You have pointed me in the direction of many a fine book. Thanks and keep up the good work!

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  3. Thanks both. I like this one for some reason. Not sure why. Sometimes they click and others are so so. And sometimes the ones I think are so so others seem to like.

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  4. I think you've got a good first draft but, IMO, you need to work in a little more context for it to be truly successful.

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  5. I like the fact that the reader can decide the context; this more about the moment and reflection.

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