Sunday, October 31, 2010

Sunday Service: Drabble

Dorte over at DJ's Krimiblog has put up a nice drabble. A drabble is a story exactly one hundred words long (and a dribble is one that is fifty words long). Along with Six Sentence (6S) stories, I think these are a great idea. I've had a go at a drabble:


There was nowhere left to run. The overgrown path ended at a bed of reeds stretching out into a lake. Either side was thick undergrowth. He glanced back the way he had come, bloodied hands on knees, sucking in air. A dog barked, joined by another. He waded out into the freezing, dark water. Behind him raised voices, becoming excited, torch lights dancing. The sound of a cartridge being jacked into place. He dived under the surface, tangling in reeds, finding it impossible to swim; holding his breath, lungs fit to burst. Rising, gasping, praying. Dogs whining, pacing the shore.

My posts this week
Review of Operation Napoleon by Arnaldur Indridason
Why focusing on the overhang at the expense of oversupply is a folly
Opening lines
Short story: Death of Me (Ramones)
It wasn't me ...
Review of Halo in Blood by John Evans/Howard Browne
An Bord Pleanala call for a renewal of the planning system
Flash story - literally


Dorte H said...

I like the way the atmosphere is intensified in the last sentences!

Anonymous said...

Rob - Great sense of urgency in this one! Terrific last line, too.

pattinase (abbott) said...

Terrific, Rob. Every word shines. We all seem to be posting stories today. Strange.

Rob Kitchin said...

Thanks. I've had a bit of a short story weekend writing. Two short stories and four drabbles. I have some ideas for others, but need to get back to some proofs. Must be something in the air.