Saturday, April 27, 2013

It's just a job

‘I’m pleading with you, Mikey.  I won’t be here when you get back.’

‘It’s just a job.  We need the money.’

‘It’s not just a job.  It’s armed robbery!’

‘And what paid for all this?’  He gestured at the room.  ‘You’ll be here or they’ll be big fucking trouble.’

‘Yeah, for you when you’re caught and thrown in prison!  Then what am I meant to do?’

‘Keep your mouth shut and legs closed.’

‘For twenty years?’

‘For forever.’ 

‘You don’t have to do this, Mikey.’

‘Yeah, I do.  It’s all planned; it’ll be fine.’

‘That’s what you said last time.’

A drabble is a story of exactly 100 words


Keen Reader said...

Not bad but in my opinion it needs to move on a bit, from A to B. Hard to do when it's all dialogue.

Anonymous said...

Rob - I like this scene. It captures the moment quite well I think.

Rob Kitchin said...

Yes, it tails off a bit, rather than the tension rising. Too rushed in the writing; drafted and published in a few minutes.