One Two Three Drip
One Two Three Drip
One Drop Three Drip
Four four time. Perfect. Sometimes it plays in a weird rhythm. Five eights or ninths. Like strange Asian music.
Sitting on the damp concrete, my back against the mildewed wall, I tap out a beat on my knees, my foot tapping an imaginary bass drum.
Occasionally there’s a misbeat ...
One Two Drip Drip Four
.. and I add a jazz flourish.
You never can quite trust the slow leak.
It used to drive me half demented. Now it’s the soundtrack to my life.
One Two Three Drip
A drabble is a story of exactly 100 words
5 comments:
That's haunting, Rob. Just...haunting. Thanks
My first comment on your excellent site.
Terrific little story!!
Love your reviews. You have pointed me in the direction of many a fine book. Thanks and keep up the good work!
Thanks both. I like this one for some reason. Not sure why. Sometimes they click and others are so so. And sometimes the ones I think are so so others seem to like.
I think you've got a good first draft but, IMO, you need to work in a little more context for it to be truly successful.
I like the fact that the reader can decide the context; this more about the moment and reflection.
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